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Posted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:28 am
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ok saturday night...i know you prolly won't believe me but...this is how saturday night unfolded...
saturday night (before i was drunk lol)...i went to this haunted house out on 224(a road outside of where i live)...yeah...the story behind it is..some guy snapped...her had three children and a wife..the children were 17,15 and 3
he snapped....tied up the whole family except the 17 year old daughter..raped her in front of his family...then he got up..got a shotgun...shot his little 3 year old girl's arms off then her head...then he shot his 15 year old son in the stomach...then he raped the 17 year old again..then shot her in the head and then shot his wife in the head...and his whole family was dead...but the 15 year old son was still kinda alive..so he took a peice of broken glass and stabbed his da din the neck and they both died...but yeah..anyway....a few people that have went to that house to check it out have died or got shot....
my friend mike and i went there...we walked in..it was pitch black...then we heard footsteps and a "who the f*ck are you!?!?" and a click of like someone loading a gun..then we heard a blast and then a window was shot out then we frickin booked out of there and mike drove allt he way back to my house doing like 120 lol
he's liek a demon...the only reason his spirit was there was because a long time ago some kids with a quija board went in there and brought him back..he shot them al of course but yeah...
i didn't really believe any of it but..yeah..even comming up to the house was freaking..the trees looked like fingers wrapping around the place making it even more dark and freaky looking..then we walked in and about 5 mins past i think then we heard foot stpes then someone yell "who the f*ck are you!?!?" and he shot at us and it hit a window right behind us
then what made me even more scared..but yet i knew nothign was gonn ahappen to me but was when mike dropped me off at my house..i heard that voice again it said "i'll be back.." and i thought mike said it at first as he was pulling away i go "WHAT?" he goes "HUH?" i go "DID YOU SAY ANYTHING?" he goes "NO, WHY?" i go "oh.."...then i went into my house
then my friend craig called me at 3 in the friggin morn. and picked me upa nd we got drunk...had fun..that was it..i needed all that...a lot of crap has been going on in my life..and i feel kinda mad at myself..cause normaly i hang in there..this is the first time i've given into pressure and escaped through soemthing...but yeah..anyway...i'm out
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Posted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:59 am
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lol if that story is true (and if the ouija part is too) then I suggest you get a preacher. lol
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Posted: Thu Dec 19, 2002 1:14 pm
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"The power of Crist compales you"... lol gr8 story...
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Posted: Thu Dec 19, 2002 6:53 pm
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Damn that freaky. The bad kinda freaky not the good kind. 
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Posted: Fri Dec 20, 2002 9:20 pm
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I'll assume you're joking about this being serious, because it is so utterly ridiculous it's hard to fathom.
It's an okay fiction story... not really, there are so many problems with the first couple of paragraphs.
"3 year old girl's arms off then her head"
That's pretty stupid, it's be kind of difficult to blow her arms off, without instantly killing her when her torso explodes. Fix that, it makes no sense...
"then he shot his 15 year old son in the stomach"
He's dead. The worst part of the story is the following line-
"but the 15 year old son was still kinda alive..so he took a peice of broken glass and stabbed his da din the neck and they both died...but yeah..anyway...
 "still kinda alive"? LOL... he's fucking dead after getting shot with a shot gun in the stomach, and it he was only hit in the stomach, then it must have been at point-blank range (since the shells spread out after you fire them), which means he's DEFINITELY dead. You really need to fix that...
The way you go back and forth in your story makes it very unrealistic- "
"except the 17 year old daughter..raped her in front of his family...then he got up..got a shotgun...shot his little 3 year old girl's arms off then her head...then he shot his 15 year old son in the stomach...then he raped the 17 year old again.."
...Then I bet he got up, shot another family member, raped his daughter again, shot someone else, and continued the process for a couple hours. I'm thinkin'...... no.
"a few people that have went to that house to check it out have died or got shot.... "
You keep mentioning stupid stuff like "kids bringing him back to life and then they get killed by him" or whatever... Stupid...
"Haunted house" stories are profusely overused... 
As a fictional story... I give it a 1/5... try harder...
And if you're serious...Or if you're saying you're serious.... Omfg... *watches respect for this guy hit 0*
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Posted: Fri Dec 20, 2002 11:12 pm
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Damn is it just me or does it seam that more than half the people on this board do nothing but go around critizing people.
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Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2002 1:49 am
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Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2002 2:23 am
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| WraithZombieMan wrote: | | Damn is it just me or does it seam that more than half the people on this board do nothing but go around critizing people. |
Dude... Don't tell me you actually think his story is true. You're being way too hypercritical (which is not the word "hypocrite", so don't confuse the two words. If you don't know what hypercritical means... look it up).
I assumed it was an attempt for some kind of writing... There's no way a sane person would write that and truely mean it, he probably just meant it as a joke, or, like I said, an attempt at some kind of practice writing.
Having read many stories and such in my life, I honestly judged and critically reviewed his story (which not just everyone will be eager to do, some find annoyance from reading stories from kids on the net), it wasn't very good. Maybe it could be better if he had more experience  .
Anyway... uh, yeah...
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Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2002 3:17 pm
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| Hell Raiser wrote: | | WraithZombieMan wrote: | | Damn is it just me or does it seam that more than half the people on this board do nothing but go around critizing people. |
Dude... Don't tell me you actually think his story is true. You're being way too hypercritical (which is not the word "hypocrite", so don't confuse the two words. If you don't know what hypercritical means... look it up).
I assumed it was an attempt for some kind of writing... There's no way a sane person would write that and truely mean it, he probably just meant it as a joke, or, like I said, an attempt at some kind of practice writing.
Having read many stories and such in my life, I honestly judged and critically reviewed his story (which not just everyone will be eager to do, some find annoyance from reading stories from kids on the net), it wasn't very good. Maybe it could be better if he had more experience .
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No i didn't belive it. But you don't have tro be harsh on him because his story isn't exactly um good. Plus he never asked you profesinol oppinin. If you don't like it all you had to say was that instead of pointing out evreything he did wrong.
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Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2002 6:29 pm
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| WraithZombieMan wrote: | | Hell Raiser wrote: | | WraithZombieMan wrote: | | Damn is it just me or does it seam that more than half the people on this board do nothing but go around critizing people. |
Dude... Don't tell me you actually think his story is true. You're being way too hypercritical (which is not the word "hypocrite", so don't confuse the two words. If you don't know what hypercritical means... look it up).
I assumed it was an attempt for some kind of writing... There's no way a sane person would write that and truely mean it, he probably just meant it as a joke, or, like I said, an attempt at some kind of practice writing.
Having read many stories and such in my life, I honestly judged and critically reviewed his story (which not just everyone will be eager to do, some find annoyance from reading stories from kids on the net), it wasn't very good. Maybe it could be better if he had more experience .
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No i didn't belive it. But you don't have tro be harsh on him because his story isn't exactly um good. Plus he never asked you profesinol oppinin. If you don't like it all you had to say was that instead of pointing out evreything he did wrong. |
I don't understand. It's called a review. He's not going to get any better with me just saying "it's bad", he would most likely want some elaboration.
I didn't go around yelling at him how much it sucked, and I certainly didn't offend him on purpose... I did nothing wrong, imo...
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Posted: Sat Dec 21, 2002 10:07 pm
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OK lets forget it ok. It just seamed to me like you were bashing him. My bad.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2002 12:48 am
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First, you must remember that his story was about his experience in the house not neccessarily the story behind the house. He only included that story so the voice of a man shouting and a gun going off has more of a creepy presense then if he were to just say he went to a house and he heard a guy yell then shoot at them. And in my opinion (not that it matters hehe) the fact that the story seemed way over the top, almost legendary (if thats the correct term), and his inconsistencies or inaccuracies helped hi story. In fact, it almost seemed that he did not even beleive the story behind the house and the only reason why he did is becuase this really could have happened to him. Or, he made it way over the top to be more entertaining. Either way, the story kept my interest.
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2002 6:10 am
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 Good interview, anyone else wanna crack at it?
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2002 8:30 am
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| Hell Raiser wrote: | | Good interview, anyone else wanna crack at it? |
thank you (if you are sincere. I apologise for assuming you are being scarcastic but I am not familiar with the meanings of the smiley's other then this one here  )
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Posted: Sun Dec 22, 2002 10:46 pm
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| ill eat your dog wrote: | | Hell Raiser wrote: | | Good interview, anyone else wanna crack at it? |
thank you (if you are sincere. I apologise for assuming you are being scarcastic but I am not familiar with the meanings of the smiley's other then this one here ) |
Uh, no, I wasn't being sarcastic... 
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