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mkfreak
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 5:22 am
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Quest For Power ~ part 1
Part1 ~ Winlass, a human born in earth realm is very known for his fighing skills, but has a very bad reputation, angerd by this he gets ready for a quest into the unknow, heading east accecpting all dangers he encounters. He enters a mountainous area, suddenly he heres a fot pattern as if someone was running, he looks behind him and he gets nailed in the face by a ice elemental creature, he falls to the ground, and gets back up right away and he says to the elemental "who are you?". It doesnt answer, instead it swings at him again, this time Winlass catches his fist and says again in a louder tone
'WHO ARE YOU?". But still the creature doesnt answer, using his other arm he hits winlass in the chest. Winlass, not recieving his answer he pulls out his scimatar, and the elemental forms a solid ice sword and starts swinging, the elemental tkaes a swing at winlass with his ice sword, winlass whillingly blocks it with his scimatar, while the baldes are still pressed together, winlass pulls out a dagger and stabs the ice creature in the chest with a powerfull enough blow to actually penetrate the ice, the creature opens his icy mouth and screams in pain, falls to ground and melts into water, winlass stares in confusion and says to himself "what the hell was that?", he picks up the dagger, and places it back in his belt along with the scimatar.
As his quest contiues, he encounters about 5 more ice elementals comuicating, speaking in unknown tounge, winlass decides to avoide them rather than fight them. As he evadeing them they all decenagrated all except one, "this one must be a sorcerer" he said to himself, as he was hiding behind a chunk of ice, the ice man spoke in english and said "I know your here warrior". Winlass, still unsure of his capabillities decides to try to avoid, and he said again "you cannot escape unless you face me". Winlass slowly pulled out his scimatar and peak his head above the edge of the small glacier, and suddenly a large glacier rose from the icy ground and inside was a dead warrior, it was a man all tatooed with unknown sybols, and has a small belt of rank witch from the looks were made of leather, and it the middle was a dragon eblem, and he wore a helmet bound of dragon skin, witch lost its color from being in ice for many of years. Winlass speakes in a loud tone of voice and say "what do you seek from me?" the ice warrior spoke and said " I seek your soul, give it to me now or you will suffer", and winlass replys "never!!". "have it your way weakling", as he stare the ice warriors enchnats a spell in a unknown language, and suddendly the eyes of the dead warrior opened, and within a second the glacier exploded and he stands on the icy land and says to winlass "you will suffer me" and sudenly a morning star made of ice appears in his hand, he starts to scream and runs forward and swings at winlass, ducking to ground the ice ball struck the small glacier and shatterd as if it were a thin piece of glass. Winlass jumps to his feet quicky and swings ay the warrior and it hits him in the theigh, causeing no damage what so ever, the ice bound man backhands winlass in the face knocking him out cold.
Thats what I have so far, I am still thinking on how the story will continue, and tell me if you like it so far.
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 8:18 am
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Great work!
Award: 100 koins.
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 8:21 am
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Thanks man!!! 
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 5:07 pm
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That's pretty cool...have anybody red stories from Vlad's website?? especially the continuation of MKC.... that's so cool...
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 7:16 pm
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very good but 1 thing.
use spaces like
blahblahblahblahbalah(paragrph lonng)
blahblahblahbalh(another paragraph)
see? But u don't have too its just easier to read.*claps*
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Posted: Sat Jan 03, 2004 8:50 pm
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No, I do have spaces. 
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Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 12:52 am
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That is not the way I posted it, it just came out that way, if I go edit it it will come out the same way, I dunno know way.
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Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 2:33 am
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Don't take this too personal but I would have enjoyed the story more had you been able to fit in on a regular sized page, without the reader having to side scroll 20 miles over to read it. You should fix that.
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Total-MK
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Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 4:39 am
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I think Zyerok means 'BREAKS' a break puts a gap between paragraphs.
after you type a line, you see the ege in the post box, thats is a good time to hit enter.
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Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2004 5:35 am
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*cough* yea um lol breaks! thats sounds better^^
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This is just plain cool, no really, cool....HAHAHA!!....get the point? Whatever. A great story, man, you should follow it up. Just can't wait for part 2.
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