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Posted: Sun Feb 01, 2004 5:36 am
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tomorrow i'll post. it'll be much better i promise.
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2004 5:57 am
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Ok this is much better i promise!!
Dead Skaared.
It has been a few weeks since Outsiders. Alpha was flying in the clouds. Alpha was a Temal. A large lizard with wings. They have no front legs just back. Alpha was scanning the Terra for Ase. He picked up a scent of Ase on a island in the Hidden Ocean. So he soared down to the island.
On the island Ase and Spinx have figured out a plan.
Ase:Are you sure your ready for this Spinx? I could go you know.
Spinx:No,I am more powerful. You still have a life.
Spinx looks at the Ocean. It is silent and peaceful. It acts like the Kannom Beam was never fired. Like Terra will not explode. The gentle ocean licked the beach then sunk back into the detphs. The sun has lowered and night is about to begin. The sun touch the ocean. They were like one in a perfect picture.
Ase nodds his head. Spinx nods back a farewell. Spinx fires a beam into the ground. It goes so far it reached the core. Without another word Spinx jumps in the hole he has made. Alpha has landed on the small island infront of Ase. Ase tells him a plan in a different laguage.
Ase jumps on Alpha. Ase gets ready. Spinx has managed to stop himself from ramming in the core. AS he floats abouve the core he thinks about his past memories. The core is red and little flicks of it are flashing in and out. Not a good sign. Spinx sighs and flies in the core.
The core begins to rumble. It does not like the intruder. Spinx is in the middle of the core. Bleeding and in pain he charges. The power sheild around tries to manage the core. Spinx charges more. Terra starts to shake. Water becomes blood. Lava and Fire fall like rain.Thunder shoots everywere hitting the ground.
Ase kicks Alpha and tries to leave the planet. Alpha flies staight up. Barley dodging the thunder Alpha and Ase head for the atmosphere.Terra becomes red. It rumbles more. The ground spilts. People under 10 die from just the rumbling. Nobody can stand this,its the end. Alpha reaches the tied between Terra and space.
They can't get through. Alpha flaps harder. Spinx can't control the core. The core killed Spinx,taking his energy its becomes even more powerful. The beatiful Terra,green and blue that shined perfectly, is now a mad house of terror,blood,death,and suffering. Then the planet explodes.
It also destroys nearby planets. Terra and everyone living on it .....is dead. Meanwhile on the dead world of Maantan Spi trains. Somthing happened to him. He is mad now. And he is more powerful. In a mounth he has changed.(week in terra days,mounth in Maantan) He senses tell him somthing has happened,and its coming this way.
Zar is on his way to Maantan. His mind tells him that ruby's spirit wasn't destroyed. So hes going to finish the job. 1 hour later Zar has arrived.
Zar:Well,well you were waiting for me?
Spi:I knew you would come. Are you going to fight or talk?
Zar:haha.....
Before he could finish Spi flies up and hits him. Zar gets mad. He prays that Spi hasn't uncovered his power. So the fight begins.Spi grows spikes on his hands. Zar is stunned how much power hes gained so fast. Spi fires a beam called "Blood Rush" This beam sends all your blood to the head. Then explodes killing you.
Zar's face blows up. Blood splashes everywere. However....Zar is still floating. Then cords wrap around and a new head appears. Muha appears from no were and hits Spi.
Muha:*snort* and i thought you were tuff.
Spi:w-w-what?
Muha and Zar: Havn't you guessed yet?
Spi: Your controling him!!!!!!
Zar:Thats right,now its time for you do die!
Zar and Muha beat up Spi very badly. Each blow knocks Spi down.
Zar and Muha: Theres only 1 way to kill a spririt.
Zar and Muha: Spirit Shard!
A huge sharp shard comes from there hands. Spi is too beat up to dodge it. Then Alpha comes and knocks Spi out of the way. Alpha moans then dies. However before his spririt died Ase caught it.
Ase:You...............
Zar:haha! 1 down!
Muha: i wouldn't count that as even "1"
Ase is very angry. He charges an assualt. He is failing though. Spi is almost dead and so is Ase. Zar then fires the Kannom beam. However while its entering Spi heals and flies away. Ase quickly destroys the entire planet with a surround beam. A surround beam is when a beam goes all around you then explodes.
In space...
Spi:It worked??
Ase:*pant* yeah think so.
You see they made a plan. Spi would heal and get off the planet,while going Ase would destroy the planet. He has Alpha soul so when he almost killed his soul he mixed in. He saved Alpha and himself. However they were wrong. True the power of the Kannom and the surround beam hit him. But he is made up of protons. A powerful liquid metal.
Zar had been trying to fight it but he could not. Muha wrapped his remains around Zar taking full control.
Spi: Now what do we do? I think he has full control now.
ASe:Yes i known
Voice:I agree.
Both jump and turn around. Spinx and Yama are floating there. Spinx explains and his sould got mixed up with the cores power. So then he twisted Yama's mind to revive him.
Ase:We MUST get back.
Spinx:You mean before its too late.....I have been skaared for death. If three days i will explode.
Spi:How were you marked???
Spinx:The core marked me. It was being controlled by Muha.
Yama:Why don't we jsut scout for anything?
All agreed and flew off in north,south,west,east.
Spi:I found a weird pillar in the north.
Ase:Yes there is one in the south.
Yama:Same for East.
Spinx:and that goes for west. I think we should explore these pillars.
So for the next week they trained. All of them faced there corners. Taking a good look at space was weird,that was what Yama was doing. He had never been in space. Or been able to fly. Space was black and cold. Little specks of comets and stars were in the background. Planets rotated around.
However in this part there was nothing but a strang light abouve them. Then they flew off to the pillars. Cold and hungry all of them went. Spinx remebers his awful past. Then he found Saga,the girl was gonna marry. Now she is dead,he is mad. Spi sees this as a test. He has been beaten all his life,now its his turn to beat somone else. Ase is blinded with anger. The death of Alpha was too much.
Part3-4 Towers
EAch enter a tower.
But one doesn't exit.
Characters-
name-Spi
Age-17
powerlevel-16
Bio- Spi grew up knowing he was diffrent. When he found out he was diffrent his life flashed. He was always beaten. Even after a mounth of training he still is being beaten. He thinks the tower is a test. Spi had spike short red hair. His body is small. He is ruby. He has the power to heal.
name-Ase
age-30
powerlevel-22
Bio-Ase used to be a wanderer of worlds. Until he came to a place called Terra. Ase save a Temal from bounty hunters, ever since the have been friends. He is very wise. But after Alpha is killed,even with his soul, he goes mad. They seemed to have formed a bond connection. He is Sapphire. He can blow up planets easily. Ase is bulky and his hair is blue. It is long and lays down.
name-Zar
age-40
powerlevel-33
Bio-Zar is a prince. He always knew he was a dragon but he never told any1. at age of 30 He met Muha. After a battle he lost and Muha controlled him forever since. He has no freedom. He is Emerald. He can teleport werever he wants if hes almost dead. Zar is very bulky and his hair is balck,long and spiked.
name-Muha
age-101
powerlevel-55
Bio-Muha is a cord machine. He is made of luiqde metal. Whenever hurt cords rebuild the part that was lost. He was programmed to kill all dragons. No one knows why though. He is just made of cords.
name-Yama
age-24
powerlevel-22
Bio- Yama is a Terran. His parents were Dragons but somhow he is not. Yama could not control his power. However one day he meet Spinx and they became friends. After coming back to life he is more powerful. Somthing was unlocked in him. Yama isn't really bulky. He wears a brown Mohak.
name-Spinx
age-26
powerlevel-30
Bio-Spinx is a very gifted dragon. He is powerful and wise,Yama is his friend. He took him in knowning he has a hidden power. Spinx is very mysterious. His mind works backwords. He is Diamond. He can read minds and feelings. His girlfriend is Saga. Spinx has long white hair. He looks wimpy.
name-Alpha
age-1000
powerlevel-1000
bio-Alpha is a Temal. A temal is a Huge lizard with wings but no front legs. He was ambushed by bounty hunter when Ase saved him then they were friends. Alpha is loayal,strong,and brave. However even with a massive power they can't use it. Though he dies and Ase goes crazy. Alpha is scaly and dinosiaur like.
If i skipped anybody or comments,questions,suggestion, pm me or just post. I hope its better than first. any1 like?
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You can't help if I'm God. I am the Shadow Killar. Bow down to me. I am the Theif. I am Fear. I am Darkness. Prepare to die.
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2004 7:18 am
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Thats pretty kool man. 
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2004 2:55 pm
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| mkfreak wrote: | | Thats pretty kool man. |
*cries* my first one stunk. i'll re-make it l8er. *sniff sniff*
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2004 6:50 pm
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um............I'm confused. 
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2004 9:21 pm
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| mkfreak wrote: | | um............I'm confused. |
lol,my stories usally stink so i was cring of happiness :_)
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