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Amon
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Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2005 5:59 pm
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Brilliant story Jay. Your a flipping genius mate! Please continue with it.
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CrystalKillaKrueger
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Posted: Sun Nov 27, 2005 12:21 am
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 Brilliant, very brillant. I like how you portrayed Mileena's past, it's very nice and descriptive. Please continue to write more, I beg of you!
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Dee Arris
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Posted: Thu Jul 01, 2010 4:46 pm
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Very enjoyable. Mileena is among my favourite female characters in the series, so I had a good time reading this. I would suggest you bring in a beta-reader though, due to spelling and grammar issues, plus sometimes you do repeat yourself a bit when it's not neccessary. The story itself is very good and I hope to see it continued, perhaps twisting events a little so things go more her way as a, "what if?" so it stays fresh and appealing.
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